Carpe Diem’s Tanka Shrine #2, Ishikawa Takuboku’s ”on the white sand”

The goal of the Tanka Shrine is to write a new Tanka inspired on the one Carpe Diem give us . For this episode it is a Tanka by Ishikawa Takuboku…

On the white sand
Of the beach of a small isle
In the Eastern Sea
I, my face streaked with tears,
Am playing with a crab

My response this Tanka is not an imitation, but it is where my mind wondered thanks to Takuboku…

800px-Lake_TobaImage by Bernard Gagnon

in a batik hut
on the shores of Lake Toba
you and I, alone
the darkness hides goosebumps
Sumatran storm, lights the why

Smiles, love and laughter

© John Belchamber 2013

If you like these Haiku, visit JRB’s Haiku Gifts


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Just a regular married father of three type of guy. Writer of Haiku, founder of and other bits and other bobs.
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17 Responses to Carpe Diem’s Tanka Shrine #2, Ishikawa Takuboku’s ”on the white sand”

  1. Wow what a beauty JRB … so full of emotions.


  2. kaykuala says:

    You captured the wonder of Lake Toba most precisely JzB! A batik shirt is a beauty too! Great!



  3. hmm that’s a stormy night in a batik hut


  4. atrm61 says:

    What better than to enjoy the lull before the storm-together!I liked the feeling of impending danger/premonition wrapped in sweet moments here:-)


  5. kaykuala says:

    Beg your pardon. This is rightly meant for JRB not JzB as mistakenly stated. Apologies!



  6. love this..darkness, goosebumps and danger shared..romance and drama. Beautiful


  7. Lovely.. so far from our dark November nights.


  8. Sun says:

    darkness hides goosebumps… 🙂
    i’m sensing good times and also a great tanka.


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