Haiku Carpe Diem’s Distillation #1, A poem by Otomo Miyuki (Manyoshu)

This is a new Carpe Diem feature called “Distillation”, the goal of which is to distil haiku from another poem. The first poem chosen is this one by Otomo Miyuki (Manyoshu):

Our Sovereign, a god,
Has made his Imperial City
Out of the stretch of swamps,
Where chestnut horses sank
To their bellies.

© Ōtomo Miyuki

My attempt to distil this poem into a haiku is…

god takes swamp mud
from the bellies of horses
sovereign’s city

Smiles, love and laughter

© John Belchamber 2013

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About jrbsays

Just a regular married father of three type of guy. Writer of Haiku, founder of www.DementiaJourneys.com and other bits and other bobs.
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9 Responses to Haiku Carpe Diem’s Distillation #1, A poem by Otomo Miyuki (Manyoshu)

  1. E A M Harris says:

    A sharp comment on the origins of the city. I love it.

  2. Wonderful distillation JRB … Thank you for being part in this new challenge.

  3. jazzbumpa says:

    mud from the bellies
    now that is seeing right to
    the core of things

    Cheers!
    Jzb

  4. 4joyjoanne says:

    a holy city….well-done…

  5. Sunshine says:

    built from swamp mud…dirty job but someone must do it. 🙂 love your offering.

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