Haiku Carpe Diem Special #27, Onitsura’s Valley Stream

Today’s Carpe Diem Haiku prompt is Onitsura’s Valley Stream

tani-mizu ya ishi mo utayomu yama-zakura

the wild cherry:
stones also are singing their songs
in the valley stream

In my work, I’ve often used the journey of a river from rain on a mountain top to ocean estuary as a metaphor for a life with all it’s changes. It seems Onitsura’s Haiku reminded me of this and the Artwiculate word of the day ‘lothario’ found his way in there too…

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in the valley stream
stones sing songs to ancestors
on a sandy beach

the wild cherry
shares its heart of stone with –
the lothario

the babbling brook tells
secrets of the mountain king
to the green valley

Thank you for coming alongside my riverbank on your journey today. Like the babbling brooke, feel free to tell others of what you see and leave a comment for me.

Smiles, love and laughter

© John Belchamber 2013

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About jrbsays

Just a regular married father of three type of guy. Writer of Haiku, founder of www.DementiaJourneys.com and other bits and other bobs.
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20 Responses to Haiku Carpe Diem Special #27, Onitsura’s Valley Stream

  1. JRB … I am speechless.

  2. O cherry with heart of stone, come sing to me!

    Singing Stone

  3. kz says:

    babbling brook..mmmn lovely, could almost hear the babble. but more than that, really loved the idea of it sharing secrets . well done

  4. 3 beautifully rendered haiku…you capture the essence of the art form – so much said in so little space….

  5. JazzBumpa says:

    the Lothario
    so highly skilled at heart theft
    weeping cherry

    Cheers!
    JzB

  6. WabiSabi says:

    Your first and third verses seem part of the same beautiful ancient song – a set! Exquisite!
    The second poem left me speechless ! 🙂

    23:6

  7. oh, how I wish for that green valley!

  8. a the lothario one is soo great. and babbling brook works fine too 🙂

  9. “stones sing” and lovely use of “lothario”. I just started following that site today.

  10. aloha JRB – i like the image of “song to ancestors” a lot. aloha

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